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I just wanted to tell you - Fanfic
« on: February 10 2006, 10:43 am »
Okay this is pretty much my first CCS fanfic. It's just little short moments/chapters from the anime. It just shows Syaoran's point of view on the situation. I just picked a few random moments and made a little story from them. Its pretty much the same as the anime but I like it. I like the way I described things. Well I accept criticism if you don't like it just tell me. If you do, that's great! I have 2 parts done and working on the 3rd. It's a 3 part series but I might add more parts if you guys like it.

Well here you go: These are the first two parts.

I just wanted to tell you – Part I
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This is a one of three part series that shows the cutest and most important moments of Sakura and Syaoran’s relationship. It is explained from both character’s point of views just to spice it up a little and show you what they are really thinking and feeling during the time.

Enjoy!

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A/N: This is Syaoran’s point of view at the time. The scene is where Sakura had just told Yukito that she liked him. Yukito tells her that she doesn’t really love him and that she will soon find the right person. She is devastated and seeks comfort in Syaoran.

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I watched her cry on the swing beside me. She told me that she had just told Yukito that she had liked him for a long time. He had rejected her and told her that she would find someone that she truly loves one day. Sakura, the one girl that I feel like I have loved for a lifetime, is setting beside me crying and she says choked between tears “I didn’t want to cry in front of him.” I just look at her and know deep in my heart what I should say but I can’t. I can’t make my mouth say the words that would make this whole situation better. I wanted to cry out “But I’m the one who loves you!” I say “I understand” and simply hand her a blue handkerchief and she looks up at me with those deep, gorgeous, green eyes and looks confused. She looks as though she doesn’t know what to do with it. She stands up and I see tears welling up in her eyes. She comes forward a little and leans her head against my shoulder. I am shocked to find that she actually was feeling content being around me at this moment. ‘I’m sure you’ll find him one day.” I just smile knowing that maybe one day I can say those words that I never have been able to say before.

Next: The Scarf

2nd part:

I just wanted to tell you – Part II
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This is the second part of the three part series that gives emphasis to Sakura and Syaoran’s relationship. I hope you enjoyed the first part so let’s move onto the second! Sorry if it’s short!

Enjoy!

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A/N: This is the scene where Sakura and Syaoran are waking home from the Tsukime shrine and gives him the scarf that she made him. It’s a very sweet scene in the anime and I think it’s just very cute and important! Well here we go!

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As we walked home together that night from the shrine, I noticed she was holding something in her hands. I turned around and asked her what it was. She just smiled and said. “This is a scarf that I made for you Syaoran-kun.” I felt my heart skip a beat when she smiled and I looked at the wooly, green, knitted scarf she was holding in her arms. “This is for me?” I asked. She nodded and offered it to me. I was hesitant to take it at first and turned around because I was afraid that she would she me blushing. “You don’t want it Syaoran-kun?” She asked quietly. I turned around quickly, afraid that she would think that I really didn’t want this precious scarf that she had spent late nights making for me. I grabbed it quickly and wrapped it around my neck. “It’s really warm.” I told her. She smiled and laughed. I loved her laugh it made me feel like we could just go on this way and this night would never end. I walked her back to her house and smiled and waved goodbye. As I walked home that night, I kept the scarf on until I got home. I really did believe that I would treasure this forever.

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Next: The Confession

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Well I hope they were okay. Sorry for them being so short.  :heh:
« Last Edit: February 11 2006, 08:46 am by Shiunu »

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Re: I just wanted to tell you - Fanfic
« Reply #1 on: February 10 2006, 10:50 am »
WAAAIII!  Big sis, you are completely and totally awesome!  -hugs-  That is so wonderful, I can't wait for the third part!
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Re: I just wanted to tell you - Fanfic
« Reply #2 on: February 10 2006, 10:51 am »
Aww thanks so much! I'm glad you like it!

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Re: I just wanted to tell you - Fanfic
« Reply #3 on: February 11 2006, 05:21 am »
Great job! Please update soon!


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Re: I just wanted to tell you - Fanfic
« Reply #4 on: February 11 2006, 05:35 am »
Thanks so much! I will!

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Re: I just wanted to tell you - Fanfic
« Reply #5 on: February 11 2006, 11:22 am »
Not a bad story. You need to put this up in the Fan-Fiction site with the other great stories :wink:

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Re: I just wanted to tell you - Fanfic
« Reply #6 on: February 11 2006, 11:29 am »
Not a bad story. You need to put this up in the Fan-Fiction site with the other great stories :wink:

Thanks! You mean the fanfiction part of capturedwings.net? That sounds like a good idea.

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Re: I just wanted to tell you - Fanfic
« Reply #7 on: February 11 2006, 05:09 pm »
If I remember right, if you post in the fanfiction section, your story is automatically updated here as well.
That's a really interesting idea...Syaoran-kun's point of view. Keep it up. ^^

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Re: I just wanted to tell you - Fanfic
« Reply #8 on: February 12 2006, 01:13 am »
If I remember right, if you post in the fanfiction section, your story is automatically updated here as well.
That's a really interesting idea...Syaoran-kun's point of view. Keep it up. ^^

Thanks so much!

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« Reply #9 on: March 27 2006, 11:16 am »
I just love stories about Syaoran's POV of what happens to him. ^^

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« Reply #10 on: March 27 2006, 02:05 pm »
I just love stories about Syaoran's POV of what happens to him. ^^

I know! I do too! That's what inspired me to write this.

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« Reply #11 on: March 28 2006, 09:11 am »
I read a couple of stories about the swing set in his POV, kinda angsty... This is very sweet. Keep going. ^^

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« Reply #12 on: March 28 2006, 11:48 am »
I read a couple of stories about the swing set in his POV, kinda angsty... This is very sweet. Keep going. ^^

Thanks! I will update soon!

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« Reply #13 on: April 18 2006, 01:23 am »
Wow, Syaoran's point of view! XD This is very lovely and interesting! :)
I really like it! Keep up the good work!
I can't wait to see the third part!! XD
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« Reply #14 on: April 18 2006, 09:45 am »
Wow, Syaoran's point of view! XD This is very lovely and interesting! :)
I really like it! Keep up the good work!
I can't wait to see the third part!! XD

Thank you! I promise I'm gonna update really soon.

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« Reply #15 on: April 18 2006, 10:03 am »
Wow, that was great, Shiunu-chan! ^_^ I'll look forward to your update!

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Re: I just wanted to tell you - Fanfic
« Reply #16 on: April 20 2006, 01:26 pm »
so good  :inlove:

they way you write is really intriguing to me, its so original...it just sucks me into the story....its amazing...i so wish i could write like that XD
but seriously that so was good...can't wait until the next part comes up!!!!

on FF.net the number of good writters there just seem to decreasing...you should post this up there...you would definitely make the number of good writters go up by just one more!~
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« Reply #17 on: April 21 2006, 11:37 am »
so good :inlove:

they way you write is really intriguing to me, its so original...it just sucks me into the story....its amazing...i so wish i could write like that XD
but seriously that so was good...can't wait until the next part comes up!!!!

on FF.net the number of good writters there just seem to decreasing...you should post this up there...you would definitely make the number of good writters go up by just one more!~

Aww thanks for the comments! It means a lot! Thanks again! :D

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