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Lets here your POEMS!!! hehe :D
Kuri-san:
haha... wow a lot of good poem stayed here. i did also made up a plan of making up this poem, and now this poem still lack of good vocaburary... i need all your support in changes in this poem! ^^
------The Lake------
once a while there was a nature lake
.. lied inside the forest
.. a virgin lake thy called..
there fill with astounding type of fishes..
can be eaten either cant be eaten...
Later.. the place was corrupted with human..
everyday a fish will be caught up..
divide the fish tastiness..
the bad taste shall be thrown back to lake..
leaving a scar of the hook..
bleeding and bleeding inward lake......
Thus, the greed of humanity shall never end...
-------***--------
Once there was a man on the lake-side..
wait and wait for the fish to eat his bait...
but,he never caught a fish before..
when a fish near his bait...
he will scared out the fish to escape..
nearby man laugh at him...
"U'll never catch a fish like this!" they laugh..
he stand up his word and said...
"I'll never hurt the innocent fishes, i will catch a fish that i only choose"
so.... he waited and waited.....
for the fish he truly wanted to take his bait....
~Namine~:
no, i really like it, it has a very different feel to it than most poems ^^ keep it the way it is, the lack of grammer and vocabulary is what makes it unique I love it!!! <3 Good work Light-san
wishingstarx:
--- Quote from: Starpheonix on April 28 2006, 02:05 am ---no, i really like it, it has a very different feel to it than most poems ^^ keep it the way it is, the lack of grammer and vocabulary is what makes it unique I love it!!! <3 Good work Light-san
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*agrees with Starpheonix-chan...* It's awesome the way it is... ^_^
Kuri-san:
whatever it be, Thanks for encouraged me! :cry: sob* I had never recieved such good-welcoming by anyone before. But now i feel more better, hontoni~arigato gozaimasu~ ^^
~Namine~:
yes your welcome, art is art, and I think each piece of art from someone els is special regardless of what critics say, yea there is things you could improve on, but I would never compare you to anyone els, you are unique and art from everyone is special ^^
<---- would make a good critic LOL!!
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